How will we progress from the first draft?

For the first time, we showed both our mini music videos for War Of Hearts to an audience of our peers to gauge their response. By doing so, we learned that the premise of the narrative was unclear in both of our drafts. The audience didn't get the hints that the artist was earlier in an abusive relationship and then died.

To fix this, we have decided on the following moving forward:

• We will film a second acting sequence halfway through the music video, inserting it after the second chorus. In this sequence, the argument which was heard during the introduction to the video will unfold onscreen. Following will be the aftermath of the argument, leading to the artist's death.
• A greater focus will be placed on the boyfriend. Instead of just the artist looking back on her life, the partner will be looking back on their relationship by means of the photos on the fridge.
• More scenes will be centred around the toxicity of their relationship.